- Working title
- The Clever Line
- Situation
- The narrator checks a post for cleverness and cuts the line they most wanted to keep.
- What the narrator is avoiding, admitting or circling
- They are admitting that wanting a line to stay is not the same as the line earning its place.
- Concrete detail
- A sentence highlighted, removed, pasted into a notes file and then ignored.
- Emotional pressure
- The pressure comes from choosing the piece over the small pleasure of sounding clever.
- Suggested first sentence
- The line looked clever, which was annoying because I liked it.